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Lilting words descend me into solace,
held within flares of sanguine walls and
grey matter couches where I escape,
while graphite fires ignite, and discourse
finds life on paper.



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5/8/2012


Copyright © 2012 Jen Fowler
All Rights Reserved.
For ~akarra's Short Poem Contest -->[link]

The theme of the contest was 'music' and the piece needed to be 30 words or less.


This placed first in the contest! :faint:
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OMG! I LOVE THIS, TOO!!!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad you like it!! Thanks, love!
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, you're very, very welcome, sweetie! :huggle:

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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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:iconcrossing-ariel:
crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
Very interesting phrasing. :) :heart:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya, Natalie. I was trying to be a little more successful with my obscurity on this one. (:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
You were successful...in the best of ways. :rose:
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Eremitik Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
Nice font....(insert wolf whistle)

I am absolutely and positively jealous of these ideas; "grey matter couches" and "discourse finds life on paper".

Hmm, without your theme of music, I wouldve said that this is about writing. Excellent work, Jen.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Jason. :aww:
I'm really glad you liked those particular ideas. I struggled with 'grey matter couches' and I know not everyone was loving on that one, but it just felt right to me.

And, this one was about writing. Music is often an inspiration in an indirect sort of way. It gets me more in tune with certain things. Sometimes it's a more direct inspiration.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
Music gets me inspired most times as well. Though I do have to be careful with what Im listening to. Sometimes it can be distracting as well. Especially if the beat is too strong or rhythmic. I find music that is more flowing works for me as I write.
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JaySpeirs Featured By Owner May 16, 2012
Very nice
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :aww:
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bslisted Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
Great job! Congrats on winning the contest!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! I was quite surprised about it!
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
What a potent elixir, this was.
Wow.. :love:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, thanks youuuu!
Music runs through my veins and lungs as much as blood and oxygen do. :heart::horns:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It so doesn't surprise me, that it does.. :heart:
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CJWilde Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Student Writer
Congratulations on winning the contest! I absolutely love this piece. It evokes such powerful imagery in my mind every time I read it; in particular, discourse / finds life on paper struck a chord. It was a perfect ending and I am impressed that you managed to fit so much imagery and emotion into only twenty-nine words. You have been featured in my latest journal and I hope it helps. :aww:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to leave such wonderful comments. I am so pleased you liked the piece.

And thank you for your support and featuring this in your journal. It means a great deal to me. :heart:
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CJWilde Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Student Writer
It was my pleasure. I hope the feature helps; you are beyond deserving of the support. :huggle:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations Jen!
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, Nic! I appreciate that!
And congratulations to you, too! I haven't read your entry yet but I'm headed over to do so now. :D
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:dance:
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RiotSong Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so good.
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youuuuu! :hug::horns:
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RiotSong Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
pssht aint no thang
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 9, 2012   Writer
It feels dreamy. (:
That works for a musical muse... They kinda remove you from reality. Or mine do, lol. :heart:
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Mmhmm...my thoughts exactly. :nod:

Unfortunately I wasn't able to come up with something better than 'grey matter couches' but I did end up changing the last line slightly, hopefully for the better. Thanks for looking at this last night.

:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 9, 2012   Writer
Bah.. Like I told you, it worked fine, it just wasn't my favorite part. I like it, though. :) And you're welcome, of course.

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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, either way, I appreciate your input. (:

:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 10, 2012   Writer
:nod::heart:
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psithurisms Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I loooove the word "lilt"
i actually feel it when i say it
this is pretty <3
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Me too; it's a great word. (:

Thanks, you. :heart:
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akarra Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Student Writer
A really beautiful exploration of the brain afire: how does the internal not just mirror, but exactly parallel, the external? Thanks so much for sharing!
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I really appreciate that. :heart:
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