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It's finally snowing again,
blankets of peace falling
with a freshness that lacks innocence.

Nearly forgotten, they're here as expected,
clearing the streets,
trying to push aside all the worry
that makes things unsafe, but

the steel mouth askew grates against my heart;
its thick bass scrape pushing more than piles of white aside,
it pushes my blood aside too,
piling it up in the corner of this pumping vessel that falters,
ice-caked and bitten, stiffened,
and keeps faltering,
again,
and again,
and again,
until the air is silent
and the street no longer shivers in torture.

The only evidence is the blanket of white
that keeps falling,
like fluffy stuffing that's been yanked out.

All is silent,
except the fond memories that peel away
from my heart in little shreds,
and the plows, scraping fresh wounds again.



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1/20/2012, 1/22/2012

Copyright 2012 Jen Fowler
All Rights Reserved
12/28/2012: I'm honored to have had this featured as a DD. Thanks so much to ^NicSwaner for suggesting and featuring it. :heart:

12/22/2012: The wonderful =SilverInkblot recorded a reading of my lil' ol' poem and posted it on the Elocutionists' WordPress site, as well as on #Elocutionists. Go check out the group! :D


From the "Winter was [never] our season" file.

This was our season
and you scraped it clear.
I like the summers better again.


Edit 1/20/2012: Tweaked a few lines, adding a lil' something
Edit 1/22/2012: Removed the hokey parts and added the tiniest bit more. It feels complete now.
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Given 2012-12-28
A phenomenal poem with a chilling metaphor. Plow is by ~BeyondJen ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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alexcinderpelt Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
huh true story stupid city government and their snow plows always messing up the perfect snow day. it's good reminds me of something i wrote a while back
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ZombieToofer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. Really captures that loneliness of roadways completely buried beneath a big snowstorm.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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xBehindBlueEyes Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderfully written. Definitely deserved the DD :heart: :D
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! I really appreciate that! :heart:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Also, featured in my showcase of 100 pieces of 2012 literature: [link]
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: How much more wonderful can you be?!
I'll be sure to check that out soon! Thank youuuu! :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student General Artist
It is complete now... and perfect. It's almost like prose in that it's very readable, and moves you onward with every word, but has the nuances and meter of poetry.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, that's a lovely comment. Thank you so much for that. I truly appreciate it. :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Awww. You're very welcome. And, well, it's true!
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