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It's finally snowing again,
blankets of peace falling
with a freshness that lacks innocence.

Nearly forgotten, they're here as expected,
clearing the streets,
trying to push aside all the worry
that makes things unsafe, but

the steel mouth askew grates against my heart;
its thick bass scrape pushing more than piles of white aside,
it pushes my blood aside too,
piling it up in the corner of this pumping vessel that falters,
ice-caked and bitten, stiffened,
and keeps faltering,
again,
and again,
and again,
until the air is silent
and the street no longer shivers in torture.

The only evidence is the blanket of white
that keeps falling,
like fluffy stuffing that's been yanked out.

All is silent,
except the fond memories that peel away
from my heart in little shreds,
and the plows, scraping fresh wounds again.



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1/20/2012, 1/22/2012

Copyright © 2012 Jen Fowler
All Rights Reserved
12/28/2012: I'm honored to have had this featured as a DD. Thanks so much to ^NicSwaner for suggesting and featuring it. :heart:

12/22/2012: The wonderful =SilverInkblot recorded a reading of my lil' ol' poem and posted it on the Elocutionists' WordPress site, as well as on #Elocutionists. Go check out the group! :D


From the "Winter was [never] our season" file.

This was our season
and you scraped it clear.
I like the summers better again.


Edit 1/20/2012: Tweaked a few lines, adding a lil' something
Edit 1/22/2012: Removed the hokey parts and added the tiniest bit more. It feels complete now.
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Given 2012-12-28
A phenomenal poem with a chilling metaphor. Plow is by ~BeyondJen ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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alexcinderpelt Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
huh true story stupid city government and their snow plows always messing up the perfect snow day. it's good reminds me of something i wrote a while back
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:iconzombietoofer:
ZombieToofer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. Really captures that loneliness of roadways completely buried beneath a big snowstorm.
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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:iconxbehindblueeyes:
xBehindBlueEyes Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderfully written. Definitely deserved the DD :heart: :D
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! I really appreciate that! :heart:
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:iconsilverinkblot:
SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Also, featured in my showcase of 100 pieces of 2012 literature: [link]
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: How much more wonderful can you be?!
I'll be sure to check that out soon! Thank youuuu! :heart:
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student General Artist
It is complete now... and perfect. It's almost like prose in that it's very readable, and moves you onward with every word, but has the nuances and meter of poetry.
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, that's a lovely comment. Thank you so much for that. I truly appreciate it. :heart:
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Awww. You're very welcome. And, well, it's true!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student General Artist
:huggle:
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:iconvaveevo:
vaveevo Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Fresh! Elegant!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconsilverinkblot:
SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy to see this in the DD's :D
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youuuuu! :D
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:iconsilverinkblot:
SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconrockeagle:
rockeagle Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
did not touch any kind of creativity in ur poem,yet nice diction u released yourself from the chaining rhyme ^^
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm rarely a fan of rhyming poetry, myself.
Thank you for your comments. I'm glad you liked it. :)
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:iconrockeagle:
rockeagle Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
me too,"poetry is just a recollection of turbulent feelings recollected in tranquility"
anytime sweet lady
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconrockeagle:
rockeagle Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
:*
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:iconprojectilewordvomit:
projectilewordvomit Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent poem-- left me feeling a bit creeped out. Successful!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconcrossing-ariel:
crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Congrats! :heart:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, dear! :heart:
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:iconeqlrytes:
eqlrytes Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Congratulations Jen! :heart:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Sheri! :heart:
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats, you! (:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, friend. :)
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
congratulatons on the DD, Jen! :nod:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya, pip! :D
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Congrats on the DD! Very well deserved!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, Lisa. Much appreciated. :D
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:icon10kdays:
10kdays Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"with a freshness that lacks innocence" - epic! I love this poem, very deep and chilling
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks so much! :hug:
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:icon10kdays:
10kdays Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   General Artist
My senses came alive as I read on and I really, really adore how sorrowfully beautiful this piece is. :love:
Congratulations on both the lovely poem and most suitable DD! :heart:
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for the kind words. I truly appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the piece. :heart:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012   General Artist
You're always welcome, lovely lady :heart:
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KichouTenshi Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Artist
I don't have the right words to use but the words have a way of gripping you and striking home. I think you did a really good job.
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for the great comment! I'm glad you liked it. :hug:
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:iconkichoutenshi:
KichouTenshi Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Artist
You're welcome :boogie:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Gentle anguish. I enjoyed your metaphoric follow through. Congratulations on the feature!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Shane! That truly means a lot; I appreciate it. :heart:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012   Writer
:heart:
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Oh I remember this one! Great choice for a DD, congratulations Jen!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Katie! That means a lot. :heart:
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tinaaw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful. I dont see snow all that often. Congrats on DD>
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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